Topic: Poetry

I'm not sure how many of you would be interested or not, but this thread stems from a conversation that I had in the chat room with a few of you. I managed to find a poem (that doesn't make me ill with the thought of posting it) on my computer (many are not or on a much older unit). So I am posting it. I think its a few years old.

Feel free to post your own poetic works if you have any!


So much time wasted
Floundered around (aground)
So much time wasted
Never upon my youth
Scribbled and trashed
Lost (some-where) inside dark passages
Insecure to pass alone in the shadow
I’ll never find enough fear or courage to get back to those places
This is the shell I have grown into
Burnt from the sun, cool breezes and green silent trees
Wise and tall standing forth to mock my very own stupidity
Letters and Languages of old memory
Slipped from my mind
Words spent in different ages
Because I have no faith to voice.
Despite all the deception placed in front of my old hopeful efforts
Holding still memories of those dreams
Others comforting arms, songs
Peace falling lovely from dark clouds
Silencing eager angers for precious moments.
To have become human-
Faltered and reborn from deathful past.
Does so much truly rest on our histories?
Such being, forced to fail
Even regardless of color changing,
Being made new
The Grey, old dirty, sinful self, deceased
The White, a new future, filled with forgiveness

Meat is murder...... tasty tasty murder.
"Suggestion: Electrocution works well. Evisceration and Decapitation are also effective, or um, so I've heard."

2 Reply by green helmeted fett (edited by green helmeted fett Thursday, February 14, 2008 12:47 pm)

Re: Poetry

Boba Fett Flying through the air
Boba Fett shooting at a hare
Boba Fett working for jabba
Boba Fett waiting for a cabba ( cab - taxi )

Shooting at the bounty
Looking at the Roundy ( sharpy's roundup )
Forking all the money
looking for a honey ( lover )

Lifes so boring
for a mandalorian
Nothing to do
not even a shoe

My name is Boba Fett
my pad ( place - house ) is not to let
My name is Boba Fett

Han Solo is a saddo
so is his friend Lando
My name is Boba Fett

P.S - i made this up, lol. Hope you like it! smile P. P. S - I like your poem, ST! , very creative! big_smile

You've been holding out on us again haven't you? Since you haven't given us enough money, I'll guess I'll have to take it out of you piece by piece! - Unknown Mandalorian.

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Re: Poetry

Thats cool Si

[i]The man in black fled across the desert, and the gunslinger followed[/i]
[url=http://lfgcomic.com/page/1]Interrogations are hard...[/url]

Adeptus_Astartes's Website

Re: Poetry

Is mine, AA? ( know's he'll say no )

You've been holding out on us again haven't you? Since you haven't given us enough money, I'll guess I'll have to take it out of you piece by piece! - Unknown Mandalorian.

green helmeted fett's Website

Re: Poetry

Thanks guys... I'm interested in anything the rest of you might have. I don't think they have to be Keats or anything.

terra, I think I wrote this peice in '04.

Meat is murder...... tasty tasty murder.
"Suggestion: Electrocution works well. Evisceration and Decapitation are also effective, or um, so I've heard."

Re: Poetry

Does anyone like mine? ( a bit annoyed ) I did make it for this thread and really worked hard on it! neutral sad

You've been holding out on us again haven't you? Since you haven't given us enough money, I'll guess I'll have to take it out of you piece by piece! - Unknown Mandalorian.

green helmeted fett's Website

Re: Poetry

ok Chilax Greenie please.  Rhyming is hard. But the effort shows. but you don't really need to explain vocabulary, unless that is  artistic descison. If someone asks then we can all help inthe understanding of something.  I tend to dissagree with the statement of "lifes so boring being a mandalorian".  But that is personal preference. Keep trying to expand your ideas.

Meat is murder...... tasty tasty murder.
"Suggestion: Electrocution works well. Evisceration and Decapitation are also effective, or um, so I've heard."

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I am horriable at poems and poetry, so I give my attention to those who can do it well. Both of these are good so far. Keep up the good work. Lets see some more.

"Trample The Weak, Hurdle The Dead"

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Re: Poetry

Si Tirian, i'm only 11, and your like, an adult, so please dont critisise. Thx neutral smile

You've been holding out on us again haven't you? Since you haven't given us enough money, I'll guess I'll have to take it out of you piece by piece! - Unknown Mandalorian.

green helmeted fett's Website

Re: Poetry

There is nothing wrong with criticizing Green.  She was only trying to help.  Think of it as constructive criticism.

[i]Like I told your captain, the orphange attacked me.  It was self-defense.[/i]  -Richard the Warlock  [url]http://archive.lfgcomic.com/lfg0002.gif[/url]

Re: Poetry

green helmeted fett wrote:

Si Tirian, i'm only 11, and your like, an adult, so please dont critisise. Thx neutral smile

You kept demanding for somebody to rate your poem, and Si told you what she thought.  If you don't like what people say about your work, don't be so pushy about getting then to tell you what they think

"You set a code to live by.  I won't be wronged, I won't be insulted...I won't be laid a hand on.  I don't do these things to other men, and I require the same from them."

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Re: Poetry

I didn't. It's just no one took any notice while they did to ST's. k? I'm not complaining! sad

You've been holding out on us again haven't you? Since you haven't given us enough money, I'll guess I'll have to take it out of you piece by piece! - Unknown Mandalorian.

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Re: Poetry

green helmeted fett wrote:

I didn't. It's just no one took any notice while they did to ST's. k? I'm not complaining! sad

You did demand for me to rate yours. I didn't because I don't realy like yours. Si gave you her thoughts on your poems, and they were not 'bad' thoughts. We know how old you are, you can stop telling us every day.

[i]The man in black fled across the desert, and the gunslinger followed[/i]
[url=http://lfgcomic.com/page/1]Interrogations are hard...[/url]

Adeptus_Astartes's Website

Re: Poetry

Why does no one like mine because i'm small? Just because i'm 11 doesn't mean you have to pick on me. sad......
still you are right mine was C***. I am only 11 so mine wont be very good anyway smile s'alright.

You've been holding out on us again haven't you? Since you haven't given us enough money, I'll guess I'll have to take it out of you piece by piece! - Unknown Mandalorian.

green helmeted fett's Website

Re: Poetry

mine is okay, and ST's is brilliant and has emotion in it. neutral Mine is just about something I made up. sad ( see the difference? )

You've been holding out on us again haven't you? Since you haven't given us enough money, I'll guess I'll have to take it out of you piece by piece! - Unknown Mandalorian.

green helmeted fett's Website

Re: Poetry

Yours is pretty cool, Terra. I personally don't like poetry, but thats just me. Anyways, thats pretty good.

[i]The man in black fled across the desert, and the gunslinger followed[/i]
[url=http://lfgcomic.com/page/1]Interrogations are hard...[/url]

Adeptus_Astartes's Website

Re: Poetry

terra wrote:

Why don't you try to write one, too?

I really don't like poetry for the most part, and I'm not good at it, really. I might try something eventually though

[i]The man in black fled across the desert, and the gunslinger followed[/i]
[url=http://lfgcomic.com/page/1]Interrogations are hard...[/url]

Adeptus_Astartes's Website

Re: Poetry

Mum is sweet, her ciggerette fume
Not so charming as a blossom bloom
Why does she smoke....... I do not know
I dont know why she smokes oh so.
alas her time continues and ends
her smoke she sends
Alas, Alas, Alas.........

You're foolish words can never hurt me

Masterchief's Website

Re: Poetry

poems don't have to rhyme, doesn't anyone here know who Walt Whitman is?

Re: Poetry

no, who is he?

You're foolish words can never hurt me

Masterchief's Website

Re: Poetry

Si, terra, both your poems are great. I feel like I can relate to both of them because I've had feelings like that before. The feeling I get from terra's poem is a more recent one because of current things going on between me and my girlfriend. I found it eerily similar. The feeling I get from Si's poem is one that I've been having for along time and is somewhat re-occuring. Thanks for sharing Si and Terra.

Est Sularus Oth Mithas
I am a Role Playing Gamer, like my father before me.

Re: Poetry

Do you like mine, Val? smile

You're foolish words can never hurt me

Masterchief's Website

Re: Poetry

The one about your mom? Its depressing. Does her smoking really bother you?

Est Sularus Oth Mithas
I am a Role Playing Gamer, like my father before me.

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Yes, It is so annoying. neutral

You're foolish words can never hurt me

Masterchief's Website

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Im sorry to hear that. Talk to her about it. Tell her how you feel. Let her know how bad smoking is for the both of you.

Est Sularus Oth Mithas
I am a Role Playing Gamer, like my father before me.