I forgot about this thread. I was actually looking for a different one.
I made an attempt to read the first book and I made it a little over 100 pages before I gave up in disgust. It was mind-numbing. My intelligence dropped a lot while reading it. For starters, whatshername who wrote it did no research on anything and made up "facts" to fit her story. For example, the first thing to come to mind, is when they make a fire on the beach and it's blue because of the salt. If there was that much salt in the air they'd be dead. Or, how about how Edward claims people can't smell blood? My husband can smell it. Or, as far as either me or my husband can think of (neither of us know a whole lot about cars, so we COULD be wrong), there is no such thing as a master cylinder in a car.
One of my biggest complaints is how MarySue is always going on about how clumsy she is. As someone who IS clumsy, let me tell you, being dreadfully clumsy isn't about lack of coordination while playing sports. The book never tells you she bumps into doorways (except once but she was mad at the time), stubs her toes, trips over stuff, bumps her knees, scrapes her arms/hands, cuts herself accidentally. Never shows her examining various bruises/cuts with no idea where they came from. These things are daily occurrences for me. She never finds new and interesting ways to hurt herself. Me, I managed to close my face in a door the other day. Almost took my glasses off. Her? She trips over a tree root. Big deal.
MarySue also feels that she's excluded from everyone, that she's different, that she doesn't fit in. ...just like a lot of teenagers feel. But everyone likes her so she has no reason to complain.
Edward is creepy and treats MarySue very condescendingly. Always amused by what she says, as if he knows all and she's just a little child. I didn't appreciate the violence in his dragging her to the car either, which he found amusing and she sorta liked. He seems to have two emotions: Amused and serious. If I were the one writing the book I'd have given Edward a flaw, for he has none such as he is now. He's above everyone, smiling with amusement at everything. This is not a good sort of male example for girls to want.
She seems to have had an idea, but had no way to convey it. She has the words there for emo, but I just don't feel it. The beginning seemed kinda tacked on. Like she had the story in her mind, but had to make a way to start the story. Which would by why she tells us everything from what clothes she's wearing to what day of the week it is, to waste space. And now that we're finally in the story we don't even know what she's wearing or what she's having for dinner. At least be consistent. Either keep up with the details or never have any details. Mary-Sue seems to exist for the sake of the story. I don't know any of her interests, except that she likes the same music he likes. She's just sorta... there.
My overall impression is that this is a fanfiction of itself. And it's not even good fanfiction either.
Last edited by Miba (Thursday, October 8, 2009 3:48 am)
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