Re: RPG---Pure Fantasy

I agree, as it seems we all have typos...but uh, I'm quite sure I spelled daggers right.

Outside of Bruun, they had unfinished work to wrap up. Dean had already taken back his weapons that were scattered everywhere, such as his katanas, daggers, and more. He drew his katanas (Alo, it happens to be katanaS because there's two of them) flames sizzled on them. Khaan made a fatal mistake he should have never made, he blinked. He heard Blight yelled out Dean's name, as he opened his eyes, one of the flaming katana was inches away from his neck. Khaan didn't dare to move, but then he noticed Dean's eyes had flip to the back of his head and there was smoke coming out of his back.

  Dean fell flat on his stomach, unconcious. Khaan looked up, a gray dragon was on the tower they were fighting on, and he could see smoke coming out of his mouth.

"Nobody from the outside shall harm any human within Bruun!" Roared the dragon.

*Place left thumb on the right side of my neck and perform a throat-slitting motion* You're gonna die in seven days!

27 (edited by Alo Fett Friday, February 1, 2008 8:17 am)

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Alo Fett wrote:

((typo it should say AT Dean's head))

rc1022 wrote:

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I don't get about the part about Dean's head...anyway,

"pull out two daggers"-typo

"Khaan dropped his dagger on his left hand."

"He quickly pulled out his dual katanas and stab it into..."-typo

"Khaan had his hand high up into the air as thunder strike on to his hand and eletricity circling around his arm.He jumped down the tower and slammed his hand on to his bleeding face."-I had a hard time with this one.

"Blight, cursed as he toke out another cigarette light it in his mouth" I think you mean "cigarette and lit it" or something like that. . .

((Just one quick thing. I am NOT trying to point out YOUR typos I'm just using your post as a example. I just want to say that I had a sort of hard time reading the way you were writing. I think you had a typo or two, witch is fine I do that too (just look at the top of my post.) But what I had a hard time reading was when you would say HE attacked and then HE blocked, or something like that, Witch one is "HE" is HE Khaan or is it someone else? This is the part I'm talking about: "...slammed his hand on to his bleeding face."
Whose hand and whose face? when I was first reading this I thought that Khaan punched himself in the face!
What I'm saying is for all of us (me included), I think we should all be sure to "re-read" your post after you post it so we can see anything that dose not make sense and fix it.
also next time if you would just post what your character is doing so that Khaan and Blight get to fight too that would be nice.Thanks for reading this off subject post. Now back to the RPG.))

RPG:
Blight looked down at the two on...well IN the ground. " You two have seemed to take after each other like nothing." Just then the king's court marched by. "What is the meaning of this!" Asks the king. "Your majesty. Let me explain, I am Blight, I am here to help with your protection." The king looked at Blight and the others he
also thought back to the beast that he had just met with. "Yes, It would seem everyones out to "Help" me these days." "Quite. But I thought that it would be best if we..." Blight said this with a sweep of his hand two Dean and Khaan (who were sill in the rubble). "...were able to get some good practice, so that we would be more efficient." The king looked at the tower and the crater. "Well next time do it OUTSIDE this city!" "Of course" said blight and with that he turned to the two on the ground and said "Who's up for a pint?"

Ummm. Did you see my post? The fight was over. I assumed you got you weapons before going to the tower. And we were "Sparing" witch means the same as training or practice so we were never trying to kill each other.

Also I wasn't saying you spelled it wrong, spelling I can deal with, it's the grammar that I'm having a hard time getting.
You said "pull out two daggers" when it should have said "pulls out two daggers"  Also I was calling you on the
"...dual katanas and stab it into..." because it should have said "...stabbed (and because there are more than one katana) them into..."
  I thought I had explained this but I'll show you again. "...slammed his hand on to his bleeding face."
Whose hand and whose face? when I was first reading this I thought that Khaan punched himself in the face!
What I think you meant was  "...slammed his hand on to Dean's bleeding face."
You see how one can get confused.

...I live by one rule and it is this: Freedom. Enslave no one and be no ones slave. No more no less. I am a hunter and no one rules me.  - Alo Fett

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((Ok, i think i'm out for now, because my character is being RPd by someone else. Listen, the problem with this, is that you dont know what my character would do. Why do you seem so sure that he would attack Dean?  I dont think he would, and he would not hold such disdain for Blight. He himself is a half demon, in case you havnt noticed. Good concept, but I'm out for now. Sorry.))

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Re: RPG---Pure Fantasy

NO don't leave me!!  I only started the fight I didn't do anything!

...I live by one rule and it is this: Freedom. Enslave no one and be no ones slave. No more no less. I am a hunter and no one rules me.  - Alo Fett

30 (edited by rc1022 Monday, February 4, 2008 2:57 am)

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lol, you made him agreed to start sparing. He's suppose to be neutral...we kind of made him on our side. A_A  come on, we didn't do much besides made you nearly killed my character! How about you do something evil like betraying us so you go neutral again?

Alo: The reason I made A_A  nearly killed me is I want him to stay neutral, cuz his affiliation for his character says "NEUTRAL" as if on nobody's side so let's say he was trying to use 'sparing' as an excuse to just kill me or something.

*Place left thumb on the right side of my neck and perform a throat-slitting motion* You're gonna die in seven days!

Re: RPG---Pure Fantasy

This rpg is sort of dieing. If people beside me and rc1022 start posting I'll be glad to post more but when it's only the two of us it's a little boring.

...I live by one rule and it is this: Freedom. Enslave no one and be no ones slave. No more no less. I am a hunter and no one rules me.  - Alo Fett