Topic: "The Beginning of The End" story of the 101st MSB

"The Beginning of The End" is a fictional story I've been writing for about 3 yrs now. The 101st MSB or Mandalorian Shock Troop Battalion and the battles they take place in is the main focus of the story.  This is a 3 part series. Book one is complete while book 2 and 3 are still in the writing process.  Book one is called "The Mars Conflict"  I set the story so earth is one of the Mandalorians heavily populated colonies and a lone outpost on mars is threatened to be overrun by the "Deathwatch"  The outpost houses a large stationary gun capable of shooting ships out of orbit and is of vital strategic importance to the Mandalorians. Jango Fett along with the 101st are dispatched to mars to aid the survivors and hold the facility at all costs.  Apon arriving on mars via the Mandalorian Flag ship "Bassilisk" the 101st are inserted by low altitude jet pack drop directly on the compounds roof. Only to discover the slaughtered bodies of hundreds of their brothers. A lone survivor is found in the compounds basement and tells the story of how the Deathwatch used individual cloaking devices to sneak into the compound. Only by switching to thermal vision could they be seen. but once the sun rose thermal vision was useless and nearly all the mandalorians were killed. Jango quickly contacts Field Marshal Meijers of this problem and is told to hold the gun compound at all costs. Little does he know that Meijers has been paid off by the Sith to send the mandalorians to their doom. Later on Meijers is assasinated by a General Veers who discovers his plot and puts and end to Meijers life. Veers is then Made Admiral of the Mandalorian Expeditionary Fleet consisting of the Bassilisk as well as battleships,cruisers and a number of other ships. Later on the Main Deathwatch Invasion Fleet exits the asteroid belt by mars and is ambushed by Mandalorian Fighters and gunboats. Suddenly a massive alien ship arrives and fires on the Mandalorian fleet with a deadly Particle Beam cannon capable of cutting ships in two. The Mandalorian Fleet is forced to retreat into a nearby gas cloud.
If you would like to hear more of this story part 2 "Into The Darkness" Email me at kfc_soviet@yahoo.com or myspace.com/jageravenger.  this is an epic story and im sure  you will love it.

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WHERE CAN I BUY IT!!!!

seriously it sounds brilliant!!

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Dude.. that is so freakin awesome PLEASE P-L-E-A-S-E SEND IT TO ME.. il e-mail u

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sadly the story isnt for sale anywhere being it is in the form of pen and paper.  But once i get it typed i would be happy to send it to anyone who asks. ill post a bit more later as sort of a teaser. Feedback is appreciated since this is the first time anyone but myself and some of my friends have read it. But not to sound arrogant this is a great story.  I'll post more of part 1 soon. thanks!

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ok i promised a teaser and here it is.  I dont have book 1 with me right now so I'll give you a little taste of part 2 "Into the Darkness" The 101st MSB have discovered a new enemy.  An ancient alien race whos homeworld was glassed by the Mandalorian Fleet hundreds of years ago during the Colony Wars. These aliens known as the "Voltoon" resemble predators and have only a handfull of their original technology and are out for revenge.  After several outpost stations are attacked by these voltoon, a full scale invasion of their homeworld "Duxin" is planned.  But an urgent distress call from a mining colony on the volcanic world of "Drakken" is heard. the invasion will have to wait as the 101st are dispatched the the ash covered surface.  But the Voltoon wont be their only threat.
       This is part of the space battle that took place over Drakken.

   Admiral Veers had his eyes glued to the viewing windows on the Basilisk's bridge, intently watching the planet's surface.
    "Sir?" a voice penetrated his thought, he turned to see intelligence officer Murphey.
    "What is it Lt.?" Veers asked forcing his gaze away from the windows.
    "Sir were detecting some anomalies on the long range scanners" Murphey said. "Originating form the opposite side of Drakken."
   "What kind of anomalies?" Veers asked.
  Murphey glanced at the small data pad in his hands. "Trace amounts of Ion energy. More so then normal, like exhaust form a starships fusion engines."
   "Our engines?" Veers asked already getting a bad feeling.
   "No sir, I've already run a diagnostic." Murphey replied. "There must be another ship."
  "Sir!" A female voice shouted, it was radar officer Silva. "Radar contacts coming into range around Drakkens darkside. We'll have a visual in 10 seconds."
  "Fierfek" Veers cursed. "Magnify the image as soon as we get a visual."
  "Aye sir"
  Veers anxiously turned to the large viewscreen.
  "We have visual sir."
  The image instantyl magnified to reveal the enormous bow of a Deathwatch Cruiser!
  Veers blood ran cold. "Signal the fleet! Come about to engage target!"
  "Aye sir!" the bridge crew replied.
  "Sir!" Silva turned in her seat "Contacts! Enemy fighters inbound!"
  "Scramble our firesprays!" Veers ordered. "Empty all bays, orders are to engage enemy fighters."
  "Aye sir!" Silva replied. "Firesprays deployed!"
   Off the bow Veers watched as hundreds of Mandalorian fighters rocketed off to intercept the Deatchwatch Vipers.
  "Charge Decimator Cannons!"  Veers ordered. "Remove all safeties from torpedos"
"Aye sir." Weapons officer Richardson replied. "Decimator cannons charging at 15% and climbing. All safeties removed."
  In space the fighters met and began trading missiles and laser fire with one another. Small bursts of orange light erupted as pilots scored kills on one another.
  "Enemy cruiser is firing!" Murphey announced. "30 torpedos inbound! Impact in 40 seconds!"
"Evasive action!" Veers ordered. "Order all ships to fire at will!"
  The Mandalorian warship "Maximus" responded by launching a salvo of her own torpedos. Plumes of smoke trailed as the torpedos crosse paths. Two streaks of light shot from her bow as she fired her decimators.
  The Deathwatch torpedos broke course and began targetting multiple ships. 15 were heading straight for the Basilisk!
  "Brace for impact!" Veers shouted.
  The Basilisk shook hard as the torpedos detonated. Veers steadied himself on the brass handrail. "Damage Report!"
  "Not bad sir." Murphey replied. "Deck 5 reports a fire in 3 sectors."
  "Seal it down and have it contained." Veers said cooly.
  "Sir" Richardson said "Decimator cannons at Max power and ready to fire."
  "Fire!"
  The deck shook as the Basilisk powerful guns fired 2 bolts of Death.
  "Deathwatch ship is taking evasive action." Silva announced.
  The Captain of the Deathwatch cruiser was no greenhorn. Using the docking thrusters he sent the ship into a steep dive. The first Decimator round missed while the second ricoched harmlessly off it's shield.
  "Damn" Veers swore "This guys good."
  "I'm reading incredibly high energy levels coming from another source" Silva reported. "A very large source."
"What now?" Veers said grimly.
  "Contact!" Silva shouted. "Another enemy ship is inbound! It's leaving slipspace now!"
  The Basilisks viewscreen magnigied on a sector of space close to the Deathwatch cruiser. There was a small ripple as a massive ship appeared.
  Veers blood ran cold. It resembled the same ship they had encountered during the Mars battle!
  "A Dreadnaught!" Veers announced. No sooner did he finish speaking when the bridge lights flickered. "All stop! Divert all power to forward shields!"
  "Aye sir" Murphey acknowledged. "Engines stopped, forward shields holding at 250%"
  The arrival of the Deathwatch Dreadnaught stopped the Mandalorian fleet cold.  All other ships came to a halt and raised their shield power.
  "Their firing!" Silva announced. "Massive energy levels, what the hell is that thing sir?"
  A blinding blue-white bolt of light suddenly erupted from the Dreadnaught's bow. A Mandalorian frigate was sliced clean up the middle.  The two halves drifed lazily apart the violenty exploded.
  "We lost the Columbia sir!" Murphey said in shock.
  "Charge our Decimator cannons, Maximum Charge." Veers ordered. "I wanna see two holes in that God Damn thing!"
  "Aye sir" Richardson replied. "Decimators charged at 200%"
  "Give me 300% Lt." Veers ordered.
  Richardson paused but obeyed. "Aye sir, rerouting fusion cell power now. Decimators ready at 300%!"
  "Fire!" Veers replied gripping the handrail.
  The force of the twin Decimators firing at such high power rocked the Basilisk hard. The high density explosive rounds reached their target at near lightspeed. The Dreadnaught had no time to maneuver as the rounds struck her bow and buried themselves deep inside her hull before detonating inside. Two huge flashes of light erupted from through the entry holes.
  "Direct hit!" Silva announced excitedly. "Enemy ship has sustained heavy damage! Their main gun is offline!"
  The crew cheered. They now had a chance!
  The Maximus also fired her Decimators at  full charge. The two rounds struck the Dreadnaught at her keel and exploded with incredible force.
  "Maximus reports two direct hits!" Murphey said turning in his chair. "Enemy ships engines are offline!"
  On the screen the Dreadnaught began to list to one side and drifted slowly out of control.
  "Deathwatch ships are pulling back!"  Murphey added.
  A com message came over the speakers from one of the Firespray pilots. "Enemy fighteres are retreating. Permission to pursue."
  "Negative" Veers replied "Return to ship. There could be more of them behind the planet."
  "Yes sir." the pilot replied. The com link ended.
  "What now sir?" Silva asked. Her adrenaline was pumping and she craved more action.
  Veers thought for a moment. "Prepare a boarding party" he announced turning to face the crew. "Were sending in the Marines!"

This was only a chapter of what ive been writing. I hope to have it all typed soon so i can post it as Fan Fiction. Please leave feedback. I want to know how it sounds to others. Thanks!

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6 (edited by Vassili Fett Thursday, November 2, 2006 11:00 am)

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also, im looking for more names to add into the story. so just tell me if you would like to be added into it as mandalorian, deathwatch, whatever. one more thing, any artists out there, im looking for weapon and ship designs.

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Little ships? Big Ships? Rifles? Pistols? Blaster? Or Projectile? I have some sketches.

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Is Jaster in it ? You could also have Montross.

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all kinds of ships, mainly designs for a dropship, gunship, and battleships,cruisers,starships etc. and the story takes place after Jaster was killed but Montross is in it. as for weapons, anything.

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10 (edited by Lord Revan Saturday, November 4, 2006 12:01 pm)

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I just drew somthing I dubed the "JZ-7 Minigun" wich is a massive hand held version and a capitol ship for some one, they look pretty sweet.
I just finished a Projectile pistol, Reapeating blaster pistol, and a sniper rifle. How many do you want me to come up with?

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great! there just happens to be miniguns in my story. well in the form of being mounted on a battlesuit.

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Lord Revan wrote:

"JZ-7 Minigun" wich is a massive hand held version

Is that not an oxymoron?

take it easy baby take it as it comes

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Not really, Have you ever seen Terminator 2 or Predator? They use hand held miniguns in both movies, wich when i mean hand held I mean about the size of a rocket launcher, very large but still portable, if you know what I mean.

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besides hand held doesnt necessarily mean only using one hand lol

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Very good! Keep up the good work!

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hey thanks!

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I think I'm better at weapons, I'll draw up some more and take a picture of them to see what you think.

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18 (edited by Vassili Fett Tuesday, November 7, 2006 7:12 am)

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Great thanks! specifically i'm looking for a standard issue blaster rifle, carbine, carbine/grenade launcher, rocket launcher, and a little thing i like to call the autocannon. also a high powered projectile sniper rifle.

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This is the main list of characters in the story, im bored so i thought i would post them.

Main Squad
Lt. Jango Fett-Company leader
Srg. Mantle- Platoon Leader/computer&weapons specialist
Srg. Dominic-Corpsman/Rifleman
Corp "Snake"-Sniper
PFC. Rodriquez- Radioman/Rifleman
Corp. Folley- Rifleman

Secondary Squads
Lt. Animal-Company Leader
Srg. Thompson-Engineer/Heavy weapons
Corp. Hayden-Support Gunner
Corp. Gagacki- Support Gunner
PFC. Rivers-Mech operator
PFC. McPheerson-Sniper
Srg. Peterson-Pilot

Others
Major Sanderson-Brigade Commander
Admiral Veers- Fleet Commander
Cpt. Schadewald-Delta Squad
Lt. Ehinger-Delta Squad
Srg. Beach-Delta Squad
Srg. Fox- Delta Squad
Cpt. Newance-Black ops

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20 (edited by Lord Revan Tuesday, November 7, 2006 3:13 pm)

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I can draw the auto-cannon like a minigun if you want me to. Oh by the way, how big is the auto-cannon? I also drew a mandalorian I named Corp. Ven Kotan, if you want to add him It'd make me happy, but if you don't, thats ok.  No, make that Gunnery Sgt.

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hey i appreciate all your effort in this! yeah i dont know if youve ever played "Star Wars Bounty Hunter" but the autocannon is a pretty beefy weapon, fired from the hip, it almost looks like it fires plasma. like you said about terminator, its held just like a minigun but only one barreled with a crazy rate of fire. in the game you shoot once and it goes off 4 times lol. as for the mandalorian you drew, id be happy to add him. any specific unit? 101st?, 502nd?, I'm kinda thinking black ops, mandalorian special forces. i need more characters for them. thanks for your input!

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22 (edited by Lord Revan Tuesday, November 7, 2006 10:05 pm)

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I just want to be the "Gunney" you know, the guy who brings the new weapons, ammo ect. I own that game, the minigun I drew was based on a gun i saw in a "wall case" I saw on the first level in the shooting range area with all the target holograms, on the right side next to where all the guys are shootng, the auto cannon you are talking about is on the left side. Sadly, since its the first level, you can't pick them up. But my friend wants a guy, so I'm drawing it right now, he is white with black armor and red shoulder an knee pieces, but I haven't thought of a name yet.  The projectile pistol I drew is based on the "Desert Eagle". It's my favorite gun, but it and the other guns I drew  are in lead form and not ink like the mandalorians I am drawing, so I'll have to re-draw it and those other guns. You might want to search wookieepedia.com for the mandalorian langauge, Just type in Mando'a in the search and go down to the bottom and it has phrases in mando'a and their meaning. I though you might be interested in it.

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yeah the D eagle is a pretty bad *** gun, as for your character i think i have a good idea of where to put him, im thinking he'll be the guy standing in the open door of a dropship as its making a delivery, i'll make sure he sees some combat though. since he's "Gunney" it kinda makes him sound like he should be kind of a hard *** you know? i picked up a lot of the Mando'a by reading triple zero. thats where im getting the idea for Mandalorian version of Delta Squad for my story. White Mando armor would be pretty sweet.

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I don't know if you have ever seen "shootout" on the history channel, but in one episode there was this guy named "Gunney Bodet" (I'm not sure if I spelled his name right) but he is the kind of guy who doesn't just brings the stuff and leave, he likes to fight. So that's kinda who I based this guy on. As for being hard, at times yes but at other times, no if you know what I mean, also if you have Jango come for some men, he would say somthing like "Yes Sir, but on one condition, I'm coming too." So he's the kinda guy who want to get out there and fight. So let me draw some more stuff and I'll try to send it to you. Also, I finished that guy I was drawing, but I still haven't thought of a name yet. And my favorite line in Mando'a is "Aruetyc Jetii'la hut'uun! Mhi Mando'ade ven shuku gar shebs." - "Traitorous cowardly Jedi. We Mandalorians will beat your ***.”
and "Gar ru kaymaru kaysh, di'kut: tion'meh kaysh ru jehaati? You killed him, you moron: what if he was lying?"

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yeah mando is a sweet language. yeah ive seen shootout and its a pretty sweet show, i havent seen the one youre talking about though but thats pretty much the image i was gonna create for your character. is the guy youre drawing now the character you want? if so yeah send me the pics so i can make a visual. Ive been debating whether or not to add some jedi to the story. If i did, they wouldnt be living very long I'll just say. But yeah im coming to the part in the story where it would be a good time to add characters so i'll put your guy in very soon.Just asking, is there any special way you want your character introduced? or any sort of special weapon or something? I'm kinda thinking captured jedi lightsaber. on a different topic, have you ever read "Star Corps"? it has nothing to do with star wars but its a sweet book and i got a lot of ideas from it. If you get the chance i would definently reccomend reading it.

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